The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount times spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount times spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The aforementioned graph illustrates the change in household ownership of electrical appliances and the average time spent on household per week in a country from 1920 to 2019.
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, there was a significant upsurge in the percentage of households with electrical appliances,
while
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the number of
hours
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spent on housework plummeted dramatically. Among the three
machines
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, refrigerators saw the fastest growth,
while
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washing
machines
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experienced a slower surge. In 1920, very few households owned electrical devices. Refrigerators were nearly non-existent
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while
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washing and vacuum cleaners were used around 40 and 30 per cent.
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, by 1960, refrigerators had risen to 90% surpassing both
machines
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. By 1980, almost all houses had these three tools,
whereaswashing
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whereas washing
machines
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increased more gradually, reaching about 70% in 2019. At the same time, the
hours
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spent on housework per week declined steadily from 50
hours
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to about 20 in 1960. By 2019,
this
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had dropped approximately 10
hours
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per week.
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, shows casing that the widespread of electricity notably reduces the amount of time spent on housework.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, machines with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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