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The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what are the possible solutions?

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It is widely known that the
internet
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 has changed how
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information
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 is broadcasted and consumed,
hence
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, it
also
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 created non-existing problems as well. The most problematic issues are people being overshared
their
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 personal
information
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 and the distribution of fake
news
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 across the
internet
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. The viable solutions to tackle these aforementioned problems are securing
information
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 privately and always doing the fact-check.
To begin
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 with, one of the most serious
problem
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 with the
internet
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 is people are being too public about their personal data.
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 is because many people thought it
just
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 a platform to showcase themselves
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 others. Another issue related
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internet
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 is the emergence of fake
news
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.
This
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 can
contributed
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 to the spreading of false
information
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 or misleading
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 either to create chaos or just for fun. Take
news
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 about Jackie Chan’s death,
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;
this
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 fake
news
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 spread all over the world via the
internet
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 world which
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is
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 not true. The first solution to deal with the former problems is to secure your
information
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 to themselves. All personal identity
detail
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details
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 must be kept
privately
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private
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 to prevent from being used by scammers.
Additionally
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,
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 the
information
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 you received before
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is essential for not falling
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a
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victim
of
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to
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 the
internet
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.
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, when reading any article online, you should find
out
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the
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a
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 reliable resource in order to make sure it is not written by
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an anonymous
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 writer.
To conclude
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,
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internet
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 has impacted
on
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the
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 being
showed
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shown
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 and perceived, it can result in sharing
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 and fake
informations
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information
pieces of information
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.
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 personal details to themselves from strangers and
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 the
information
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 before taking the
information
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 with reliable resources are two possible solutions.

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task achievement
Try to provide clearer definitions and elaborations on your main points. For example, explain why oversharing personal information is harmful.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that indicates the main point. This will help in logically structuring the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use precise language and grammar. For example, revise sentences to avoid awkward phrasing and ensure proper verb agreement.
task achievement
You have identified relevant issues related to the internet and proposed practical solutions, which is a strong aspect of your writing.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cybersecurity
  • phishing
  • identity theft
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • social isolation
  • internet addiction
  • data privacy
  • digital literacy
  • regulations
  • awareness programs
  • manipulate
  • proliferation
  • consent
  • escalated
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