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The pie charts below show favorite social media channels from 2011 to 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show favorite social media channels from 2011 to 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagrams below indicate some social
media
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 channels that were the most popular from 2011 to 2013.
Overall
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,
Facebook
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 is a favourite social
media
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 channel with the highest
percentage
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 over the years.
In contrast
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,
Pinterest
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was
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had
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 the smallest
percentage
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 of the favourite social
media
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channel
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.
However
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, the scale of
Facebook
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 decreased significantly and other social apps
such
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 as
Twitter
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,
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Linkedln
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Linked
, Google+, and
Pinterest
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 had a minimal rise in 3 years after. As can be seen, the
percentage
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 of
Facebook
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 was 59% which was higher than the total
percentage
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 of other apps in 2011. In 2011, both scales Google+ and
Pinterest
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 had the lowest just 5% and the
percentage
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Linkedln
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LinkedIn
 was double Google and
Pinterest
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.
In addition
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, people using
Twitter
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 was pretty much with 21%. In 2012, the
percentage
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 of
Facebook
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 suddenly fell
down
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to 49%.
While
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 other
media
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such
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 as Google,
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Linkedln
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Linked
 and
Twitter
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 grew moderately about 2% to 5% and
Pinterest
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 which had a litter change rose 1% after 1 year. In the next year, participants in voting for
Facebook
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 declined substantially by about 11%.
Conversely
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,
Twitter
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 took a quarter of the total scale;
Pinterest
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, Google+, and
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Linkedln
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LinkedIn
 increased by 8%, 14%, and 15%, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words media, facebook, percentage, pinterest, twitter, linkedln with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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