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In many countries, the government prioritises economic growth above all other concerns. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.

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It is thought by some that countries around the world prioritize economic
growth
above all
 other concerns.
Although
 it might cause an increase in the cost of living, there are a few advantages
such
 as job and financial opportunities for
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the country
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country
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country's
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 population.
This
 essay will examine the advantages and disadvantages of the topic and provide a logical conclusion. The two main advantages are increased employment opportunities and household capital.
Firstly
, economic
growth
 has a huge impact on various aspects of the life of the
country’s
 population.
This
 way, the influx of money in the system leads to
growth
 in production and households, which amplifies the need for additional
labor
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.
Secondly
, economic
growth
 expands
financial
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the financial
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 capabilities of households.
For instance
, with
increase
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an increase
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 in capital, it becomes possible to expand financial instruments to achieve objectives, which gives a super-stimulus to the
country’s
 economy.
On the other hand
, the
growth
 of economic transactions and the improvement of the quality of life affect the increase in prices and the cost of living. A sharp rise in food and housing prices could trigger inflation. What’s more, as inflation accelerates, the stability of the
country’s
 economy will be threatened.
However
, proper financial management and correct usage of financial instruments revenue by the government can eliminate
this
 disadvantage.
To conclude
,
although
 economic
growth
 can have certain negative effects like inflation and increasing the cost of living, it has an extremely positive influence on the
country’s
 progress and provides a large number of new jobs for the people. I believe that these benefits of economic
growth
 outweigh its drawbacks.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points, particularly in the discussion of inflation and economic opportunities.
task achievement
Ensure that all ideas are fully developed, especially in discussing how governments can handle economic growth to mitigate inflation.
coherence cohesion
Use more varied cohesive devices to enhance the flow between ideas and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the discussion well.
task achievement
You addressed both advantages and disadvantages effectively, showing a balanced understanding of the topic.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure is mostly sound, providing a coherent flow of ideas.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • quality of life
  • standard of living
  • infrastructure development
  • employment opportunities
  • environmental impact
  • wealth disparity
  • modernization
  • sustainable development
  • Gross Domestic Product (GDP)
  • industrialization
  • ecological footprint
  • capital investment
  • urbanization
  • economic prosperity
  • fiscal policy
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