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Writing Samples
Band 8

You have a suggestion for a park nearby where you live. Write a letter to your city’s council. In your letter include: •what your suggestion is • why you think this suggestion will improve the park • when you would like to see this suggestion in action

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my ideas or suggestions for improving the facilities of a park which is situated in my community, and it would be an essential need not only for the kids but
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 for the older generation of
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 country. I need your attention regarding the infrastructure of
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 public park, which has not been well-maintained by the government for the
last
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 few years. I am kindly requesting you to apply some new amenities
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 as a source of water, a yoga room, more plants, public washrooms, and some new rides for kids. I casually noticed that many parents were facing difficulties because there were few benches for sitting
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 their children were playing.
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, it should be the government's responsibility to provide the best facilities for the public. By implementing all these above-mentioned things, I would strongly say that people would like to come to the park daily, which is not happening right now.
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, they would engage in some social activities and gain some more knowledge about social interaction. I would deeply appreciate it if you could give your immediate attention to
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 matter.
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, I am expecting that you could start your work as soon as possible so we can enjoy the environment before the winters come. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours Faithfully, Rupinder Kaur

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task achievement
Consider providing more specific details about the park, such as its location and current state, to give the council a clearer picture of your suggestion.
coherence and cohesion
Try to enhance your paragraphing by ensuring that each paragraph focuses on one main idea, which could improve clarity.
tone
Your writing style is polite and suitable for a formal letter, which is a strong point.
task achievement
You have clearly articulated the need for improvements in the park, demonstrating good understanding of the community's needs.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • dedicated
  • enhance
  • community engagement
  • promote fitness
  • outdoor activities
  • seasonal
  • floral displays
  • beautify
  • public restrooms
  • convenience
  • establish
  • community garden
  • social interaction
  • sustainable practices
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