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"The chart below shows the GDP of four countries in 2005 and 2010."

"The chart below shows the GDP of four countries in 2005 and 2010."
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The bar graph displays the
GDP
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 of the USA,
Japan
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,
China
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 and Germany in the years 2005 and 2010.
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, all four countries increased
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,
while
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 America had a
GDP
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 many times greater than any other country in both years. The other significant
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 of
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 graph is that
China
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 nearly tripled its value in just 5 years. America had a
GDP
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 of around 13,000 in 2005, triple that of
Japan
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 in second place, which only had a
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 of just over 4,000.
Japan
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's value was twice as much as the lowest in 2005, namely
China
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, which only had a
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 of just over $2,000.
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, Germany's
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 was a little under 3,000. The United States increased its
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 to approximately 15,000 in 2010, but
China
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 made significant gains
on
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them
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by increasing
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 value by nearly $4,000 to $6,000, overtaking
Japan
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 as the second-ranked country. At the same time,
Japan
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 and Germany's
GDP
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 increased to just over $5,500 and $3,500, respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp, japan, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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