In the modern world, the image is becoming a more powerful way of communication than the written word To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed that our form of being social has changed over the years to a stage where photos
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taken over as the primary source of
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communicating
in today's world.
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and because of the visual generation.
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programmers develop new and exciting
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to communicate. These
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the user to make use of photographs, taken from their cellular device, in order to show other users what they are doing.
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, internet access in our modern society, causes users to load these
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online faster than they could have typed it. Snapchat is an example where a person can send photos to individual people, showing them what they are up to.
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feature, allowing them to unlock certain filters depending on the amount of photos that they have sent.
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, people find visual
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more interesting than reading material. A study has found that nearly 80% of children prefer to look at pictures rather than reading information about it. The youth
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it to be tiring and less exciting.
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this
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form of communication may cause a decline in school results
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textbooks in schools not
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accommodating
these learners. In conclusion, our modern society
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the use of images as a more effective form of
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due to
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networks and a generation looking through lenses.

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task achievement
Expand your introduction to provide a clearer context or background for your argument and to outline the main points you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure to proofread for grammatical errors and typos. For example, 'communiting' should be 'communicating', 'agress' should be 'agrees', and 'infromation' should be 'information'. These small errors can affect clarity and professionalism.
task achievement
Try to include more relevant and specific examples to support your points. For instance, you could briefly mention how images impact communication in business or marketing as well.
task achievement
Your essay presents a clear stance and indicates that you will support this stance with reasons, which is essential for task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
The examples of social media platforms used are relevant and contribute to your argument about the dominance of images in communication.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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