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Band 3.5

n the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extend do you agrer or disagree with this statemnet?

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In the coming years, the quantity of people who read newspapers and books will decrease,
as a result
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, they will have access to
read
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everything on the Web without
no
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any
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 cost. I strongly agree with the idea that buying
in
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online is
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benefit for
environment
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the environment
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 and
do
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 not need extra charges. From my point of view, reading
on
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online can have a lot of advantages for circumstances. Because of books and journals .
For example
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, one of the common digital
network
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networks
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 among teenagers and adults
it
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is
app
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an app
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 called 2Books,
its
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 attracted a lot of people of its amenity and having amount numbers of tome.
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,
its
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 useful for people who are starting to learn English. The reason why readers tend to read on
network
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networks
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 is that because it
do
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 not ask extra charge. These days the cost of reference
book
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books
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 and
magazine
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magazines
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 increased
than
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to
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 previous years,
it
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which
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 prevents
to
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many audiences
to
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from
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 not allow lack of cash.
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, the website by named engoo.ru recently published that
percentage
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 of book lovers declined to about 50%
due to
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 its expensive for social. Eventually, they now read e-books because they are more affordable and offer a wide selection of press.
To sum up
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, reading
in
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online is more convenient and cost-effective for everyone. One of the benefits of e-books is that they offer a lot of choices and
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are suitable
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 for both kids and adults.

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task achievement
Clarify your main arguments and ensure that they are fully supported with explanations and examples. Some points lack depth.
coherence and cohesion
Organize your essay more clearly with distinct paragraphs for the introduction, body, and conclusion. This will help with the flow of ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure. Some sentences are incomplete or contain errors that may confuse the reader.
task achievement
Your argument about the cost-effectiveness of online reading is relevant and addresses a key issue in the topic.
task achievement
You’ve incorporated an example that can connect with readers, particularly regarding the app '2Books'.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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