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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019.
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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of households owning electrical gadgets and the number of
hours
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 spent on
housework
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 per
week
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 between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that the
ownership
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 of electrical appliances increased significantly,
while
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 the time spent on
housework
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 per
week
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 decreased. In detail, refrigerator
ownership
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 was at 0% in 1920 but rose dramatically to 90% by 1960 and eventually reached 100% in 2019.
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, the use of vacuum cleaners and washing machines followed an upward trend. In 1920,
ownership
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 stood at 40% and 30%, respectively, and both continued to rise. Vacuum cleaners consistently remained more popular than washing machines throughout the years, reaching 100%
ownership
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 in 2019,
whereas
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 the percentage of households owning washing machines was just under 70% in the same year.
According to
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 the second pie chart, the number of
hours
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 spent on
housework
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 per
week
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 declined steadily from 1920 to 2019. In 1920, households spent 50
hours
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 per
week
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 on
housework
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, but
this
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 figure gradually decreased to just 10
hours
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 by 2019.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, housework, week, ownership with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • electrical appliances
  • housework
  • time frame
  • variables
  • trends
  • significant milestones
  • turning points
  • correlation
  • reduction
  • influenced
  • societal implications
  • quality of life
  • gender roles
  • economic implications
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