Many people believe that public facilities (e.g. zoos, museums, parks)should be free. Other people think that you should pay to use these facilities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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park
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parks
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they
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the entrance
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mentioned location .larg
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difficult
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members
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disagree because there is
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offer and the amount of the
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some facilities provide
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ticket for a
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the
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will never care about the importance of
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whereas
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people
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behaviour ,I agree with them and I believe it will help to develop the country and will lead to
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tourism ,for
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clarify
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one of the best
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who need to let
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because it
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contain
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fee
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help
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the historical and
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important
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to make sure all citizens will enjoy
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them without
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any
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and all
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will know the
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places
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in the country.

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task achievement
Your introduction contains spelling errors and some grammatical mistakes. Make sure to clarify your opinion more clearly and correctly.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your paragraphs are clearly organized. Each paragraph should contain one main idea that is clearly introduced and supported.
task achievement
Provide clearer and more specific examples to support your points. This will help strengthen your argument and make your ideas more relatable.
task achievement
You successfully present both sides of the argument, which demonstrates an understanding of the topic. This is a good critical thinking approach!
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes your stance on the issue, which is important in essay writing.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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