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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.
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The current charts illustrate the type of
dance
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classes
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 most preferred by two age groups of the youth in one of the cities of Australia and
also
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 the
location
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 of these
classes
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 which are currently held.
Overall
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, the most popular
dance
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 class among under-eleven
students
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 is ballet.
However
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,
this
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 is the modern
dance
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 for the age
group
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 of 11 to 16. What is more, regarding the pie chart, the majority of
students
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 are attending private studios as the
location
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 of the
classes
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. The college-based studios are the least preferred
location
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 to hold the
classes
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 by the percentage of 10.
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, 48% of
students
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 are attending the private studios as the most popular
location
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. School halls
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community halls and others are the second and third most preferred locations by the percentage of 24 and 18 respectively. Most of the
students
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 under 11 years old have enrolled in ballet
classes
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 with a total enrollment of 600
students
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 and the least popular type of
dance
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 is the modern one for
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group
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 of age with a number of 300
students
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, but
this
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 is completely the opposite for
students
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 of 11 to 16-year-old
group
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.
That is
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, 300
students
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 are participating in ballet
classes
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 as the
last
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 preferred and nearly more than 500
students
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 have chosen modern
dance
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. Approximately 450 under-11
students
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 and 420
students
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 of 11 to 16-year-old
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group
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 are attending tap
dance
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, classes, location, students, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • distribution
  • attendance
  • community centers
  • dance schools
  • private studios
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • ballroom
  • analysis
  • popularity
  • accessibility
  • cost
  • cultural trends
  • media influences
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