More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which can not be treated by modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicines should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree ?

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Healthy life is

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the most important part of life.

Overtime

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, more and more people get health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which

unable

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to be treated by modern medication. Some people consider returning to

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medicines should be encouraged. In

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essay

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I will discuss both advantages and disadvantages of modern and traditional ways to cure someone. As a matter of fact,

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daily, we are all getting sickness from

pollutions

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, foods, and drinks, but only in small

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, if you

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might not notice them at all, but in

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your body can't take it anymore.

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of telling you what your body

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, it

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you small

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which seem to be harmless. In fact

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main

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cause

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cancer and many other uncurable

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such

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obeycity

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obesity

, and

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diabetes

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. Clearly, technology has

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improved

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futher

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lately in every term, but how can you be sure that newer medicine

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more efficiency

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Some suggest using herbs like we used to do in the past is better.

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to notice modern

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not able to cure

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some cases like

Parkinson

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or cancer, but some plants can. That

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trying to

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traditional method can be a great idea.

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, it is important to know that in long-term usage, sometimes these plants might cause

you

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additonal

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additional

effect

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effects

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which you don't want

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as lower your antibody,

problem

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with bones and body structure or at worst it can let to

cadiact

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cardiac

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. As far as I

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concered

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concerned

, I still

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people to

use

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modern medicines rather than traditional medicines, because we already know

its

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side

effect

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and how to

use

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properly. But if we are exactly sure detail about using old fashion way and it's the only way to cure, that

when

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I think it

the

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proper to

use

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language

Improve grammatical accuracy and reduce spelling errors (e.g., 'arguable' should be 'arguably', 'unable' should be 'unable', 'obesity' instead of 'obeycity').

structure

Ensure clear topic sentences for each paragraph to guide the reader. Each paragraph should start with a clear main idea that relates back to the question.

content

Expand on ideas with more specific examples and explanations to support claims regarding modern and traditional medicine.

task achievement

The essay addresses the task by discussing both modern and traditional medicine.

coherence

A logical progression of ideas is present, with an attempt to explore both sides of the argument.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

312 words

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More and more people are suffering from health problems caused by a modern lifestyle which can not be treated by modern medicines. Some people think that a return to traditional medicines should be encouraged. To what extent do you agree ?

Include an introduction and conclusion

As a result of electronic inventions ,people do less physical activity and this is having a negative effect on their health . To what extent do you agree or disagree

Children these days spend a lot of time apart from their parents because in many homes, both parents work. What problems can be caused by this? What are some ways to support such children?