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The chart below shows the average cost of a monthly contract for four different mobiles (cell phones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euros.

The chart below shows the average cost of a monthly contract for four different mobiles (cell phones) in a European country from January to September 2002, measured in euros.
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The presented line chart compares data about how much average money per euro people had to pay for 4 various telephone companies namely, Domo, Lex, Sim Tx, and Alpha between
January
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 and
September
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 of 2002.
Overall
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, it was important that the price of all of them other than Alpha increased over the period of 10 months.
According to
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 the diagram, in the beginning, Domo, the costly cellphone from
January
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 to August, hit 15;
then
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 it rose significantly and reached the vertex at 25 in July;
however
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, it reduced slightly to roughly 23 in
September
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. Lex scored nearly 13 the first time;
thereafter
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, it declined fractionally to 10 in February;
then
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 it climbed moderately to just under 20 in
September
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. The graph demonstrates that Alpha recorded approximately 10 in
January
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 after that, it dropped to almost 8 in February;
then
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 it grew somewhat to the maximum mark at nearly 15 ;
nevertheless
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, it dipped to nearly 7 in
September
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. Sim Tx reported 5 between
January
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 and February;
then
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 it went up fractionally to nearly 7 in April, but it decreased to the same number as the start.
Although
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, it leapt considerably to 25 in
September
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words january, september with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 4 times.
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