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The plans show proposed changes to a university art gallery. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given maps describe the plan of the university art gallery in the present
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and after certain structural changes. Generally, the
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 structure is going to experience significant changes and become wider, at the same time enhancing its functionality. At present, when people enter Milk Road, they see three sections of exhibition
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, and a lobby on the left side, from their perspective. In the near future, it will be changed and widened, by demolishing walls in the main
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 and building new ones horizontally, dividing it into two spaces. The lobby will be replaced by an education centre, and the main
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 will be expanded, to place a table and chairs for conversations.
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, at present time there is an office on the right side from the entrance, and there is only one way to get there, from the outside of the building. It is anticipated that removing the office and modifying it into a second hall of exhibition
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, by removing walls and creating a free entrance. In conclusion, Milk Road will be changed into a more educational and entertaining place for society, rather than just an exhibition venue.

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Consider adding more specific comparison points between the current and future structures to enhance your task response.
coherence
Ensure that each paragraph clearly connects to the main features you're discussing, possibly by using clearer linking phrases.
coherence
Revisit the introduction to give a clearer overview of the major changes that will occur between the two plans.
task achievement
The essay provides a clear overview of the changes intended for the art gallery.
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There is a good attempt to describe specific areas of the gallery and their future functions.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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