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The government is spending a lot of money discovering life on other planets. Some people think that governments are wasting money and should spend more money addressing the problems of the public. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are frequent discussions going on about the utilization of
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 resources.Many believe that
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governments are spending unnecessary funds to explore other planets
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 neglecting the actual needs and
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 of the public. To a partial extent, I agree with
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 statement as it is significant to address the current social problems,
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, one cannot unsee the importance of discovering a new planet that capable of being a new habitat. On the one hand, the present public concerns have to be addressed  first-hand,
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 it is the
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's duty to provide a better environment for the people. Social
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, like poverty, climate change and health
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 are need to eliminated from  society to create a better environment.
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, the
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 should make plans to eradicate these hazardous problems that can make the
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 uninhabitable, rather than commence with the abandoned plans of
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, financial support to the healthcare field can assist in improving the quality of life for the community. Not only that, but practical measures to ensure the
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 of climate change can help to increase the lifespan of the
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.
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, the widespread availability of renewable energy can help  people to shift from fossil fuel use.
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, it is important to focus on present
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 of society, before focusing on the distant
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.
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, the current state affairs of the
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 are controversial. Consequences of prolonged exploitation of the resources of the habitat have caused  strong distress among the governments  led them to fund more into the
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 of mankind.
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's lifespan is questionable with the existing scenarios, and many species have gone extinct in recent decades.
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governments and
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other officials are forced to provide financial aid which can support researchers with advanced technologies and instruments for a sustainable
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. In conclusion, the above-mentioned points justify my viewpoint.
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 it is essential to explore and eliminate current public
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, like climate change, it is
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 significant to find an alternative to the
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, considering the existing inferior status of the habitat. A balanced approach to  the
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's resources on both the present and
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 environment can help to mitigate the public's disinterest in
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task achievement
You have demonstrated a reasonable understanding of the topic and presented a balanced view about government expenditure on space exploration vs. public issues.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main points, reinforcing your stance on the need for a balanced approach.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • public funding
  • inevitable
  • technological advancements
  • resource allocation
  • immediate public issues
  • scientific research
  • long-term benefits
  • cognitive development
  • expenditure
  • sustainable development
  • interdisciplinary
  • innovation
  • extraterrestrial life
  • investment priorities
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