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Band 3.5

In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driveless. The only people travelling inside these vehicle will be passengers. Do you think the advantage of driveless vehicles outweigh the disadvantage?

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With the rate at which technology is advancing, many believe that vehicles will be automated.
Although
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this
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 might cause national hardship and lack of
employments
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 in some sectors, it will potentially reduce the
occurance
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occurrence
 of
road
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 traffic
accidents
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.
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, I completely agree that the benefits outweigh its consequences.
This
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 essay will explore these views. On the one hand,
driveless
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driverless
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 cars
posses
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risk
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 to national revenue and drivers. With automated
vehicle
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vehicles
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 in
existance
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existence
, the need for driving schools and jobs will be pointless, which element taxations received by these sectors from the government, and will deprive drivers of their job
position
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positions
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.
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, taxi or bus
driver
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drivers
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 will no longer be required, which
as a result
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 causes economic crises and hardship to the nation.
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, major
road
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accidents
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has
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 been attributed to human activities
such
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 as carelessness, or overspeeding.
This
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 type of
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accidents
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account
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to
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for
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 the most common causes of non-disease death globally.
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,
a
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apply
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research conducted in Malta regarding
road
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 traffic
accidents
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 showed a significant percentage of drivers were under the influence of alcohol.
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, a driverless car could
combact
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combat
 these issues by minimizing human involvement in driving. In conclusion, despite the use of automated vehicles
might
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 weaken the economy in some sectors and render some people jobless, I firmly believe
it
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 advantages in combating
road
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accidents
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 outweigh these drawbacks.
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, governments should weigh both factors in order the maintain a
well rounded
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 society.

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task achievement
Strengthen the development of your main points with more examples and elaboration.
coherence
Make sure your paragraphs flow logically and that transitions are clear. Use linking words to connect ideas better.
cohesion
Ensure grammatical accuracy and spelling to enhance clarity.
task achievement
The essay presents a clear opinion on the topic, showcasing your perspective effectively.
coherence
The introduction sets up the argument well, making it clear what the essay will discuss.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomous
  • Congestion
  • Mobility
  • Cybersecurity
  • Ethical dilemmas
  • Human error
  • Fuel consumption
  • Environmental benefits
  • Initial deployment
  • Unavoidable accidents
  • Enhanced technology
  • Independence
  • Quality of life
  • Streamline traffic flow
  • Optimize
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