The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. four

The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. four
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The pie graphs present the e-commerce
sales
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for four sectors namely, Electronic &
Appliance
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,
Food
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&
Beverage
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, Home furnishings , and Video Games in Canada during 2005 and 2010. The data is described in
percentage
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percentages
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.
Overall
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, the market share of
electronic
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the electronic
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&
appliance
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sector
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was at the
the
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top of the
taple
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table
rather than the other sectors.
However
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, the consumer preference
of
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in
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food
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the food
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&
beverage
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and video game sectors
were
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significant growth
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. It can be deduced from
chart
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the chart
a chart
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that the
food
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&
beverage
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sector
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was
highest
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the highest
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decrease throughout the years
started
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from 22% (in 2005) to around a third (in 2010). If we compare
that
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apply
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the
food
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&
beverage
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sector
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to
electronic
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the electronic
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&
appliance
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sector
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we notice that the largest amount of
sales
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goes
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went
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to
electronic
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electronics
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&
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appliance
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appliances
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by
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35% in 2005 but it
was
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decreased slightly by 5% during 2010.
Last
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but not least, it is interesting to notice
the
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that
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home furnishing
sales
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had a gradual
decreased
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decrease
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from a quarter in 2005 to 15% in 2010, respectively.
In contrast
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, the video game
sector
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had more
intersting
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interest
and the
sales
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rose by 5% during 2010 in Canada.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, appliance, food, beverage, sector with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 3 times.
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