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The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times.

The maps below show changes in the city of Nelson in recent times.
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The given maps illustrate how Nelson has changed from the year 2000 to the present day. Generally speaking , there have been significant developments in the town,
such
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new
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as new
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shop
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shops
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 and
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market
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markets
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, restaurants and bars. Only a university had no changes. In 2000, the
city
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 had a university in the north, a train station in the
north-west
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northwest
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, and a small park nearby. There was
also
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 an old
market
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 on the west side and a
city
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 centre located near the port. At that time, the
city
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 mainly offered basic public services, with limited shopping options. Looking at the present, Nelson has been significantly modernized . A new residence hall has been constructed
in
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on
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 the north side close to the university, providing more housing for students. The train station has been upgraded and relocated closer to the town
center
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centre
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, and a new shopping
center
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centre
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 has emerged in the north-east,
while
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 the old
market
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 has been replaced by a new shop,
along with
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 a new covered
market
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.
Additionally
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, a bike rental program has been introduced in the
city
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 centre. The highway that
located
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is located
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under
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in
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city
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the city
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 centre , was used to accommodate cars, but now is exclusively for pedestrians.
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, new leisure venues like restaurants, bars, and clubs have opened up near the port.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words market, city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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