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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter say how important New Year is to people in your country describe how New Year is celebrated in your country explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

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Dear Alex, I am writing to tell you about our New
Year
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 and how people celebrate in our country. It will be interesting for you because you are going to visit Israel in the New
Year
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. For many people it is important to celebrate New
Year
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 because they are repatriated from CIS countries so for them they keep up old traditions. Many families put Christmas trees and decorate the Christmas tree to lay gifts for their close family. Congratulations to others and set the festive table. New
Year
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 is not an official holiday in Israel but the government made it official for people from CIS countries. I like New
Year
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's, it is a fun holiday and we
also
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 have additional days off. I hope that I will be given full information about how to celebrate in Israel so if you have some questions you can contact me I will be happy to answer any questions you may have. Best regards,

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider separating your ideas into clear paragraphs, especially when transitioning between different topics, such as the importance of New Year and how it's celebrated.
Task Achievement
Try to provide more specific examples of traditions or activities that take place during the New Year's celebrations to enhance your response.
Writing Style
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.
Task Achievement
You’ve included relevant information about the significance of New Year in Israel and how it is celebrated, which answers the task well.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant
  • reflection
  • goals
  • loved ones
  • fireworks
  • gatherings
  • traditions
  • public events
  • religious ceremonies
  • festive atmosphere
  • reconnect
  • exchanging gifts
  • resolutions
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