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The chart below shows the average sales for two Australian companies on each weekday over a 5 week period

The chart below shows the average sales for two Australian companies on each weekday over a 5 week period
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The chart presents the average revenue collected by the Australian corporations A
Corp
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 and
B
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Corp
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 on each weekday. The averaged
sales
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 numbers, represented in Australian Dollars, have been calculated using 5 weeks of earnings data.
Overall
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, the chart reveals that A
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Corp’s
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 earnings outpaced
B
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Corp’s
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 over the
five week
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 period. Thursday
sales
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 were similar between the two firms.
While
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B
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Corp
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 performed better than A
Corp
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 on Monday and Friday, A
Corp
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 did significantly better than
B
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Corp
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 on
Tuesday
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 and Wednesday. In fact, A
Corp
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 had one of the most successful days for either company on
Tuesday
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, which was
B
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Corp’s
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 worst
day
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. With A
Corp
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 taking in 26 thousand dollars and
B
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Corp
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 averaging about 18 thousand, Wednesday was the strongest
sales
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day
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. Yet, A
Corp
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 had
similarly
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 strong numbers on
Tuesday
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 earning $24,000 and Thursday with $22,000.
B
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Corp
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 only kept up with that pace on Thursdays by taking in $20,000. Looking at combined
sales
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, the slowest
day
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 of the week was Friday.
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 was A
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Corp’s
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 least profitable
day
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 with only $12,000 coming in.
B
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Corp
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 could only pull in an average of $16,000 that
day
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, which was still higher than its
Tuesday
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 total of $10,000.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words corp, b, sales, corp’s, tuesday, day with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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