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During our careers, we work with many different kinds of people. All of them have unique characteristics and personality traits. In your opinion, which of the following is the most important characteristic of a coworker? • a serious attitude regarding their work obligations • a willingness to learn new things • the ability to make other people laugh

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In the place where we go there almost every
day
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 and we have to stay there for eight hours per
day
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. We always hope that every single
day
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 will pass early and easily. If our station makes us feel comfortable and happy It would be interesting to go to work every
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.
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, it is the important thing in an office is the personality of a colleague. We have to work with many coworkers. In my opinion, an important characteristic of a coworker is people who have a serious attitude regarding their work obligations. The key to success is the cooperation of the workers and includes a serious attitude as well. If the team get a person who is always so serious about the job it will make the team achieve its goals faster.
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, serious society
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 going to have a stressful time with each other. And
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make
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 the environment and some situations worse.
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, I think the job should have the kinds of community more than one type. It makes there
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 balance and might make someone's life full. Probably the person who has the ability to make
other public laugh
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another public laugh
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 the main character. Since the co-worker feels uncomfortable or disappointed from working. The population who can make others laugh and smile are the best way to heal them from the bad times. In summary, The power of working is the mental health of employees. whether there are any characteristics or any situations, The boss should manage everything well and should pass by the correct way The boss has to protect his employees and company to the best solution.

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You have identified a key characteristic of coworkers and made a case for its importance.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work obligations
  • productive work environment
  • efficiency
  • personal growth
  • professional development
  • adaptability
  • team morale
  • stress reduction
  • positive work culture
  • collaboration
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