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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart displays the amount of individuals participating in
badminton
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,
basketball
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, tennis, and rugby in a specific area from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
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, the number of humans playing rugby saw a dramatically upward trend. A slight increase could be seen in the figure
of
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for
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 tennis. The
players
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 of
badminton
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 and
basketball
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 remained steady over the given period. Despite starting as a common sport, rugby
players
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 decreased dramatically over time from about 250 to 50.
In contrast
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, there was a gradual growth
for
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of
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 tennis
players
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 from 150 in 1985 to
the
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a
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 peak
at
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of
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 roughly 220 in 2005. The people who played
badminton
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 and
basketball
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 experienced stability throughout the 20 years.
However
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,
basketball
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players
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 were more than
badminton
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players
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 by approximately twice.
While
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basketball
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 was played by 100, There were 50
players
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played
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who played
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badminton
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words badminton, basketball, players with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • popularity
  • demographics
  • sports
  • region
  • data
  • analysis
  • comparison
  • notable
  • overview
  • highest
  • lowest
  • 20-year period
  • particular
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