IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6

You are disappointed with the electricity provision in your local area. Write a letter to your council. - explain the problem; - state how it is affecting local people; - suggest some possible solutions

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Dear Council, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction regarding the electricity provision in our local area and to bring to your attention the concerns I have encountered formally. I believe it is important to address
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 three months, I experienced poor electricity provision from your company. Unfortunately, my experience was far from satisfactory. I am an accountant
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 some serious businesses and I work mostly online. But recent blackouts affected negatively
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my work.
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 issue has had a significant impact on me, causing inconvenience and distress. I expected better from your company, and the current situation does not meet the standards of quality and service that I have come to associate with your brand. I want to complain about what happened. In light of the above, I am seeking compensation for the service in question provision. I believe that a fair resolution to
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 would be satisfying my needs. I trust that your company values its customers and is committed to providing excellent service. I expect
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 to be addressed promptly and resolved to my satisfaction. Thank you for your prompt attention to
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 issue. I believe that, with your cooperation, we can resolve
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 amicably. Yours sincerely, Daler.

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task response
Clarify the suggestion for solutions in your letter. While you mention 'seeking compensation', consider adding specific solutions, such as improving service reliability or providing backup power options.
coherence cohesion
Try to break down your issues with electricity into clearer points, which would make it easier for the reader to follow your concerns.
coherence cohesion
Your closing could reiterate your key points more strongly to emphasize the urgency of your concerns and the importance of a timely response.
writing tone
The letter is polite and maintains a formal tone throughout, which is appropriate for the context.
task response
You effectively communicated the impact of the electricity provision issue on your work, making it relatable.
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