Children do not respect their parents as much as they did in the past. This behavior is now having a negative impact on society.’ Discuss. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In today’s era,
children
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do not respect their
parents
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as
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to
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the past
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.
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, others argue that
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behavior
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negative
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results
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on
society
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. In my notion, it is a positive development. In
this
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essay, I will justify both perspectives before presenting my opinion. To commence with, when the
children
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fulfill
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their demands from the
parents
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than
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then
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they used to ignore them as much as they even disrespect
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values in their life.
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,
children
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need some electronic devices like mobile phones, laptops and computers they insist their
parents
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to
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buy
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without concern about their financial conditions, and when they
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them they
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forget their
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.
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,
children
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move to new places for
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aspects, and
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time they totally ignore their
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,
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and enjoy their life fully.
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, they
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look after their house and old
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. Moving ahead, the bad manners of
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affect the
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. In the
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society
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society,
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there are reputed families. They maintain their culture and decorum of the
society
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by respecting each other
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as elder people are mostly
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.
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, in functions when elders are coming to join they
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not get the chairs to
seat
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, but youngster
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not leave their
chair
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for their elders, and in
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way they
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them.
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, the large amount of pocket money got from their
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will lead to indulging
children
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in drug addiction. In conclusion,
the
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children
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fulfill
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their
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demands
from
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of
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parents
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and ultimately
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ignore
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them.
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, it
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society
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by indulging in drug addiction. Maintaining a balance between spending money in less amount will lead to controlling their
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