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The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Consumer Spending on Travel (US $ Billion)

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should Consumer Spending on Travel (US $ Billion)
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The bar chart illustrates the
travel
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 expenditures of the top ten countries in 2014, measured in US
billion
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dollars
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.
Overall
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, China recorded the highest spending on
travel
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,
while
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 Taiwan had the lowest expenditure that year.
To begin
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 with, China topped the list with approximately 110
billion
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 US
dollars
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 spent on
travel
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, significantly surpassing all other countries. The United States and Germany followed, each spending around 85
billion
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 US
dollars
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. The United Kingdom ranked fourth, with
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 expenditures just below 60
billion
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 US
dollars
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. Meanwhile, South Korea, Hong Kong, India, Malaysia, and Taiwan all reported
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 expenses of 20
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 US
dollars
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 or less. Notably, both South Korea and Hong Kong spent an equal amount of 20
billion
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 US
dollars
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. At the bottom of the ranking, Taiwan had the lowest
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 expenditure, spending approximately 10
billion
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 US
dollars
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. In summary,
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 China led global
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 spending in 2014, there was a significant gap between the highest and lowest spending countries.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words travel, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • spending
  • travel budgets
  • ranking
  • economy
  • consumer behavior
  • significant
  • notable
  • comparative analysis
  • patterns
  • habits
  • implications
  • spending habits
  • highest
  • highest-ranked
  • total expenditure
  • top-tier
  • lower-tier
  • economic status
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