Write a letter to a friend about an item you borrowed last week, that accidentally got damaged. In your letter – Describe the item. – What was the damage? – What do you intend to do to rectify the problem?

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Dear Chloe, Hope you are doing well. I am writing
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letter to apologise because the laptop that I borrowed from you
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week, has been damaged accidentally. To commence with, I always keep all the electronic things in my room but yesterday night, I was working on my computer assignment and suddenly my child came near to me and he put some milk on the keys. I tried to clean everything within seconds but the laptop shut down and did not open.
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, I went to the service centre of Dell company, and they rectified the issue and confirmed that it would take more than one week to sort it out. The person told me that the internal power has been damaged and it needs to change with the new one. I know that it is a valuable item for you but it happened accidentally. It would be really appreciated if you could forgive me for
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mistake. The company will deliver your laptop next week at your address. Let me know if there will be any issues, I can contact the firm again. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Kind regards, Kulwinder Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Consider adding a brief introduction to the issue at the start to create context before diving into details.
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Try using more varied vocabulary and complex sentence structures to enhance the overall quality of your writing.
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The letter maintains a polite and friendly tone throughout, which is appropriate for writing to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the letter is clear, with distinct paragraphs that address different points effectively.
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