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The graph shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the four countries between 1967 and 2007.

The graph shows average carbon dioxide emissions per person in the four countries between 1967 and 2007.
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The given graph illustrates the amount of average
carbon
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dioxide
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 emitted in metric
tonnes
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 per person in certain European countries – United
Kingdom
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,
Sweden
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, Italy and Portugal - from 1967 to 1997.
Overall
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, we can see that
United
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Kingdom
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 had the highest
carbon
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dioxide
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 emissions compared to other countries
while
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 Portugal had the lowest rate through the years.
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, the gap in the amount of
carbon
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dioxide
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 released was considerably wide in 1967
although
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 it narrowed by 2007 among the countries.
To begin
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 with, Italy and Portugal saw a similar trend between 1967 and 2007. In 1967, Italy had just over 4
tonnes
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 level of
carbon
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dioxide
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whereas
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 Portugal depicted about 1 tonne, the lowest emission as shown in the graph. A significant increase was observed
both
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 of them in the next 40 years to 2007. In 2007, Italy’s figure rose to just under 8
tonnes
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carbon
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of carbon
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dioxide
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, the second largest value fall behind
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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. Meanwhile, Portugal gradually ascended to well over 5
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, which is a point that
Sweden
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 and Portugal met.
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,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 maintained
firm
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the firm
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, which highest quantity of
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apply
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carbon
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dioxide
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 from 1967 to 2007 in
this
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 graph. It is noticeable that
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 and
Sweden
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were
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had
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 the first and second highest emissions respectively in 1967. Up until the year 2007,
United
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the United
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Kingdom
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 witnessed a slight decrease and reached
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about 9
tonnes
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.
However
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,
Sweden
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 approached to
U.K
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UK
in the first 10 years and
then
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 declined sharply.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, tonnes, kingdom, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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