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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.Korkem

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities.Korkem
The given table shows the information about underground railway
system
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 in six cities (London,
Tokyo
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, Paris, Washington, Kyoto,
Los
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and Los
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Angeles
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angeles
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)
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 London
system
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 is the oldest one
that
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which
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 has 775 million
passengers
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while
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Tokyo
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the Tokyo
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system
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 which opened 64 years after most used and has more
passengers
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. London’s underground
system
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 was opened in 1863 and has the longest network, covering 394
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kilometers
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kilometres
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.
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, it serves fewer
passengers
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 compared to
Tokyo
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, which has 155
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kilometers
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 of track but carries the highest number of
passengers
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. Paris, which opened in 1900, has a route length of 199
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kilometers
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 and serves 1,192 million
passengers
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 per year, making it stand after
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Tokyo
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the Tokyo
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 railway
system
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 . Washington, Kyoto, and Los Angeles have relatively newer and smaller networks. Washington’s
system
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, opened in 1976, has a route of 126
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kilometers
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kilometres
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 and carries 144 million
passengers
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 annually. Kyoto and Los Angeles have much shorter routes of 11 km and 28 km, respectively, and serve the lowest number of
passengers
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Vocabulary: Replace the words system, tokyo, passengers, kilometers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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