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The provided line chart depicts the rate of citizens living in urban spaces of four countries in Asia over the course of 70 years, beginning from 1970

The provided line chart depicts the rate of citizens living in urban spaces of four countries in Asia over the course of 70 years, beginning from 1970
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The line graph illustrates information about
indigenous
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Indigenous
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school
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schools
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 living in four different
kind
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kinds
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 of Asian
nations’s
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nation's
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 urban areas between 1970to 2020
as well as
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expect
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expected
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 to 2030 and 2040 It could be clearly upset from the chart that
Philippines’s
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the Philippines’s
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 figures had some fluctuation in
this
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 trend. Malaysian figures will
be reach
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reach
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 a peak
at the end
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 of the period. On the one hand, Malaysian
figure’s
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figures
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. started with around 30
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percentage
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per cent
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 of
total
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the total
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population
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 in 1970
as well as
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 five decades ,
after
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apply
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it
was
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rapidly increased to approximately 75
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percentage
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per cent
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 of
total
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the total
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population
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, and it will
be rise
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rise
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 to roughly 84
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percentage
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per cent
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 of
total
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the total
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population
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 in 2040.
moreover
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, started with beginning
internation
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international
population
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 was the lowest compared and
other
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others
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 in 1970
then
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 over the period in 2020 international trend showed
some
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a
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 significant
increases
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increase
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about
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of about
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 50
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percentage
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per cent
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 of
total
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the total
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population
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at the end
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 of the period
internation
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international
 figure
expecting
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is expected
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 to
will
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apply
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be
rich
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apply
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60
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percentage
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per cent
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On the other hand
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 in 1970,
Thailand
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Thailand's
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population
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percentage
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 was nearly 20 at the same time it will
be partially rise
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partially rise
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 to about 42
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percentage
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per cent
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.
However
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, it will be the lowest
according to
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 the chart
like
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apply
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West Philippines
population
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 was 31
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percentage
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per cent
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 in 1970
while
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 in 2020 it was nearly 35
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percentage
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per cent
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however
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, it will be nice to 50
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percentage
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per cent
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 of the total
population
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 after the two decades.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, at the end, however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, population with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 10 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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