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Writing Samples
Band 3

You have bought a washing machine.First you found that the machine did not work properely, and you had it changed.Then you found that the new one seriously entanged the clothes.

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Dear Sir/Madam On June 17,2025,I purchased a washing machine (SofiaZA2013) from your company.A few weeks ago I found that
while
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 working it turned to only
one
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 side.A technician
of
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from
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 your factory tried to fix it but failed and I asked you to change it for a new
one
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.I am afraid that I have to ask you to change it again.
This
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one
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 turns to both sides all right,but it entangles the clothes seriously that when it automatically begins to spin the water out, the machine would often shake madly and stop
bu
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 itself.In the instruction booklet you have not mentioned
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 defect,
neither
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nor
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 have you told the user how to solve the problem.I am quite annoyed
bu
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 the fact that sometimes when I
came
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come
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 back from work to take the clothes out to dry, they
were
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are
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 still unwashed. Please change new
one
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 that does not entangle the clothes. I hope you will resolve the matter to our satisfaction. Yours faithfully, Larry Smith

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coherence and cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and is well-developed with more details. This will help to create a more logical flow in your letter.
task achievement
Adding specific examples of how the malfunction affects your daily routine could strengthen your argument and provide clarity.
coherence and cohesion
The letter is structured correctly, with a clear greeting, body, and closing. This helps to present your message effectively.
task achievement
You express your concerns clearly, making it evident that you are seeking a resolution to the problems you've encountered.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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