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The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025.

The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three countries and predictions for 2025.
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The chart above illustrates the
people
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's movement from villages and countryside to
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urban areas and the modern lifestyle, where it is happening in
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countries
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 for 25 years from 2000 till the year
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2025.
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, the
three
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countries
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 are named as (A and B, C).
According to
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 the chart, the
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countries
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 have shown a significant increase in these rural movements toward
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modern cities in the years from 2000 to 2025.
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, starting at emphasizing
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country "C" which remains steady at its lowest level of moving villagers at 10 million till the year
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2005, where it started moderately increasing till 2025.
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, country "A" showed a gradual increase over 25 year period.
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, the regions "A" and "C"
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both
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 similar movement to the urban areas by reaching 85 and 95
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moving villagers, respectively.
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 country "B" was more solid and fixed by starting from 10
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moving
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 and increasing progressively to be fixed at 30
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people
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.
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, as the drawing shows the more years pass the more
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 move towards new chances and new lives in the cities and urban areas in all
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three
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Countries
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.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, three, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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