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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram
illustrate
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 data about the process of
plastic
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bottles
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bottle
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 recycling. 
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, it's clear that
plastic
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bottles
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bottle
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 recycling are
infinity
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 cycle. These
prossesses
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processes
 have 9 stages. In the 1st stage, people throw
a
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plastic
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,
then
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 in the 3rd stage, workers allocate
in
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recycling
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 centre: sorting. In
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4rd
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 to
8rd
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 phases, they re-change materials, and in the
9rd
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 phase, they recreate some products.  Looking at the information in more
details
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, we can notice that
the
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 1st phase, people
garther
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gather
 the trash, afterward they use transport for taking the rubbish.
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, in
3rd
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the 3rd
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 level, recycling:
sorting
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and sorting
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 distribute materials
which
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will
be recycle
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.
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, in
4rd
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 to 5th
steps
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, workers compress into blocks
,
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 and crush them.  In
6th
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the 6th
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 period, they produce
plastic
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 pellets,
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 In
7th
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 level, they use heating
for giving
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 pellets the form of raw materials.
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, in the 8th and 9th points, they produce end products for selling in the future.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words plastic, rd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • collection
  • recycling centers
  • transported
  • recycling plant
  • sorted
  • cleaned
  • impurities
  • shredded
  • flakes
  • melted
  • pellets
  • raw material
  • manufacturing
  • containers
  • clothing
  • recycling loop
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