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Band 5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is suggested that
people
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 will refuse to purchase printed newspapers or
book
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books
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 because it will be more comfortable for them to read online without paying any charge.
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 essay completely agrees with the given idea because that trend will help
people
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 not to waste their money and save our environment by cutting less trees.
Everyday
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people
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 all over the world buy millions of
books
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 that cost
particular
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 amount of money which varies depending on the material on which the book was printed. A huge number of trees
gets
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chopped
everyday
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 to meet our different needs, which include our cultural interests too.
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, after the
apperaence
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appearance
 of e-
books
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 and
newspaper
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newspapers
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, the number of customers manually decreased.
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, the results of
survey
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a survey
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 conducted in 5 cities
of
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 Germany
shows
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 that the figure of consumers who preferred to buy printed
books
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 or newspapers declined by 56% and the reason was that
people
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 find online reading more convenient and cheaper.
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, global problems,
such
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 as
doforestration
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deforestation
 and emissions of greenhouse gases make community
to
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apply
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take care of nature more than they did in the past and they tackle the issue in various ways. Obviously, one of them is reducing
amount
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the amount
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 of trees that get felled
everyday
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 in the world,
as a result
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, most readers nowadays do not prefer to get printed
books
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 and newspapers as they are not ecologically friendly.
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, the result of interviews by local
eco-activits
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eco-activists
eco-activities
 in Moscow depicts that 78.2% of the young are more likely to read e-
books
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 rather than printed ones owing to the fact that they are financially and environmentally friendly. In conclusion, the essay fully agrees that in the following
years
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years,
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 society will choose reading online over reading physical
books
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due to
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 lower cost and ecological benefits.

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task achievement
Consider providing a clearer definition of what is meant by 'reading online without paying.' Are you referring to free access to content, public domain works, or other paid subscription models? This will strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
In your body paragraphs, aim for a more cohesive structure by using linking words and phrases to clearly relate your ideas and arguments to the previous points. For example, transition phrases like 'Furthermore' or 'Additionally' can enhance flow.
coherence and cohesion
Try to avoid small language errors such as 'apperaence' (appearance), 'doforestration' (deforestation), and 'eco-activits' (eco-activists). Proofreading your work can help reduce these minor issues that might distract from your overall argument.
task achievement
You present a clear opinion and provide a logical structure to your argument, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
task achievement
Good use of relevant examples to support your claims, particularly regarding the survey in Germany and interviews in Moscow, which adds credibility to your argument.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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