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48.The charts below show the number of international students in Canada and USA in 2002 and 2003, also the changes of the increase in student population over the two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

48.The charts below show the number of international students in Canada and USA in 2002 and 2003, also the changes of the increase in student population over the two years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The tables depict the
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 of overseas
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, which includes China, India, and the United States in
Canada
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 and Canadian
students
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 in the UK, in 2002 and 2003,
in addition
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 to the changes in the rise of the student population over the period.
Overall
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, the average number of
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 in the
USA
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 was the highest in both years,
whereas
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Canada
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 recorded a higher percentage of changes in all given nations. On the opposite, the total number of overseas
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 in the United States was much lower than in
Canada
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.
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, there was only a reduction in Indian learners in the United States during that time. Regarding
Canada
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, China was the most crowded with 5,400
students
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 in 2002, which
then
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 increased by 45% to 7,850 in the following year.
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 but at a lower percentage, the
USA
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 obtained 5,000 in the first year
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 and only gained 9% more, which was 450 additional
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 in 2003.
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, the lowest figure was for India with only 2,100 learners in 2002,
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, it rose to 2,835 in the next year
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 and recorded higher growth than the
USA
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, which was less than half. In total, overseas
students
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 in
Canada
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 have grown 17%, from 59,870 to 70,004 respectively in the given years. As for the
USA
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, the first ranked was India
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 it was the only one that decreased among nations, starting at 200,000
students
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 in 2002 and
then
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 reducing by 9% to 182,000 in 2003. Meanwhile, Canadian ones were the least crowded,
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, figured the highest growth at 7% with 31,000
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 at the beginning and 2,170 more
at the end
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 of time. A slightly lower percentage than that was China, which ranged from 110,000 to 116,600 with a 6% change.
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, the number of international
students
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 in the
USA
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 only increased by 2%, from 581,600 to 592,230.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, canada, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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