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In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development

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In recent years, the number of people who choose to live alone has increased significantly both
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professionals
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 and individual purposes.
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 some argue that living alone can cause some
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 in life,
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 believe it can develop personal growth effectively.
This
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 with, one of the benefits of living alone is that it allows individuals to access freedom and flexibility. When people stay alone, they do not need to consider
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 and can have a distraction-free environment. They can decide their own ways of living and manage their daily routine without waiting for or considering
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 allows them to prioritize
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 more efficiently.
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, individuals who live alone need to handle daily responsibilities
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 as cooking, cleaning
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 financial planning, which lead to the development of soft skills.
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, there are
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 several risks that people who decide to live alone need to take.
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, they might encounter financial difficulties as they need to cover all living expenses
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 as monthly rent, bills, and utilities on their own. These costs will be much higher compared to living with parents or sharing the unit with
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. Another potential risk that they must handle is personal security. There might be some
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 occurred,
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, and they might not have anyone who can provide immediate assistance, which will lead to serious consequences. In conclusion,
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 living alone will allow you to access freedom, flexibility and personal growth, individuals must
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 be prepared and respond
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 the risks involved.

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task achievement
Expand on the points you make with more detailed examples to support your arguments.
task achievement
Ensure all main points are balanced, addressing both sides clearly and thoroughly.
coherence and cohesion
Try to enhance the flow between your paragraphs with clearer transitions; this can strengthen coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Consider restating your opinion more explicitly in the conclusion to reinforce your stance.
structure
The essay presents a clear introduction that outlines the two perspectives on living alone.
idea development
You provide logical reasons for both the benefits and risks of living alone, which is an important aspect of balanced argumentation.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • independence
  • personal freedom
  • autonomy
  • self-reliance
  • personal development
  • sense of belonging
  • loneliness
  • isolation
  • mental health
  • financial stress
  • cultural shifts
  • social norms
  • fulfillment
  • community values
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