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The graph below shows the changes in production (millions)of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the changes in production (millions)of three products in a garment factory from 1990 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates
change
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the change
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three
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in three
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 types of clothing
of
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apply
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output in a garment factory over a 20-year period. It is clear from the line graph that the coat increased consistently between 1990 and 2010, and the
others
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other
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 products saw a rise in the end than
beginning
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the beginning
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. In 1990, the
coat
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cost
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 of
production
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was arounded
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arounded
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around
 5 to 10
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millions
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million
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,
while
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 the suit and dress of
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production
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the production
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 stood at 10
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millions
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million
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 and
15millions
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15 million
. From 1990 to 2000, the
coat
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cost
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 of
production
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 rose dramatically from 7
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millions
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million
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 to 25
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millions
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million
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, it
beacame
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became
 the first ranking in the factory.
By contrast
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, the suit of
production
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 peaks at 22.5
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millions
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million
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 in 1995 and
then
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fall
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falls
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 back to 16
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millions
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million
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 in 2005, and
grew
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grows
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 to 19 million in the
last
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 year. The dress of
production
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 rose steadily from 10
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millions
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million
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 to 15
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millions
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million
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 between 1995 and 2010, and the line graph
also
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 saw a decline
about
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of about
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 1
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millions
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million
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 from 1995 to 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Production volume
  • Garment factory
  • Trend (increasing, decreasing)
  • Comparative analysis
  • Fluctuations
  • Market demand
  • Technological advancements
  • Production capacity
  • Raw material availability
  • Economic conditions
  • Notable observations
  • Significant shifts
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