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The pie charts below show favourite social media channels from 2011 to 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The pie charts below show favourite social media channels from 2011 to 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The pie charts
provides
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provide
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 us
information
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with information
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 about
Add an article
the change
a change
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change
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changes
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of
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in
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 social media platform users in the
year
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years
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of
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apply
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2011, 2012, dan 2023.
Overall
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,
Facebook
Use synonyms
 experienced
to
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apply
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the most
application
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applications
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Correct pronoun usage
that was
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was
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were
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 used for many years. back turn into the picture,
Use synonyms
facebook
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Facebook
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 was the
famous
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most famous
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 application among
the
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apply
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people
during
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in
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 2011, 2012, and 2013 which was 59%, 49%, and 38% respectively.
However
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,
facebook
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 facing went down gradually from 59% in 2011, 49% in 2012, and 38% in 2013.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, Twitter,
Linkedln
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LinkedIn
, google, and
pinterest
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Pinterest
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 witnessed
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an increased
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increased
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increase
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slighly
Correct your spelling
slightly
 during the year. Twitter increased from 21% in 2011 to 25% in 2023.
Linkedin
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LinkedIn
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 rose marginally from 10% in 2011 to 15% in 2013. In
Additon
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addition
, google had double
percentage
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the percentage
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 from 10% in 2011 to 14% in 2013.
Moreover
Linking Words
, Pinterest
also
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 went up from 5% to 8% through the year
of
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apply
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periode
Correct your spelling
period
.
To sum up
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 ,
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facebook
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Facebook
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 was the most users and trendy
channels
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channel
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 over the
periode
Correct your spelling
period
.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words facebook with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • percentage
  • trend
  • popularity
  • social media channel
  • data
  • overview
  • rise
  • decline
  • shift
  • platform
  • distribution
  • user preference
  • notable
  • significant change
  • comparison
  • highlight
  • survey
  • analysis
  • demographics
  • year-on-year change
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