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Band 4.5

An English-speaking friend wants to spend a two-week holiday in your region and has written asking for information and advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter offer to find somewhere for your friend to stay give advice about what to do and see in your area give information about what clothes to bring

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Dear Bracewell, I hope you're doing well! I learnt
abudant
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abundant
 from you especially, English speaking as you're a native speaker. I'm extremely
exited
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excited
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 to see you after
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a long-time
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long-time
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long time
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 as a
vaccation
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vacation
 you're visiting to spend
great
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a great
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 holiday in our region. I will provide you
clear
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with clear
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suggestion
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suggestions
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 and detailed information about my
hometome
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home
 that
helps
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will help
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 your stay.
Personally
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Personally,
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 I guide you to stay in
recently
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the recently
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renowated
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renovated
 5
star
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stars
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 Villa
that is
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 highly
recommed
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recommended
recommend
 for your even
I
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though I
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know your lifestyle .
Moreover
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, You prefer
luxurious
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a luxurious
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 stay with
mexican
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Mexican
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 and Italian food rather than Indian food so
that is
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 all available
their
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there
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 so that suits you.
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on
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On
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 the other hand, I heartfully welcome you to my home if you wish to stay and I will try to furnish
chinese
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Chinese
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 food by my
sister
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sister's
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 hand she is very good in cooking now learning some of
new
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the new
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 dishes. You can visit my city mall named
as
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apply
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Mall of Asia which is
number
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the number
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 one mall in Asia country. Numerous ancient temples you can explore
such
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 as
gatisubramanya
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Gatisubramanya
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 temple, maduri etc.
near
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Near
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 our town and Nandhi hills you can
do
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go
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 hiking it's
an
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a
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 heaven place for nature lovers. Now the season is summer so you can bring cotton garments which
is
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are
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 comfortable. Primely lightweight clothes
good
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are good
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 for travel. apart from that bring 1 or 2 sarees which is good
while
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movement
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moving
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 to temples. Let me know! Keep in touch. Best regards, Latha Nagaraju.

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coherence and cohesion
Your letter contains useful information, but organizing your ideas with clearer paragraphs could enhance clarity. Consider separating accommodation, activities, and clothing advice into distinct paragraphs.
task achievement
Make sure to proofread for spelling errors, such as 'abundant' instead of 'learned a lot' and 'exited' instead of 'excited.' This will improve the overall professionalism of your letter.
task achievement
You included personal touches and specific recommendations, which adds warmth to your letter. This makes it more engaging for your friend.
coherence and cohesion
Your enthusiasm about your friend's visit is evident, which creates a friendly tone throughout the letter.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accommodation
  • attractions
  • landmarks
  • cultural events
  • outdoor activities
  • regional cuisine
  • seasonal weather
  • suitable clothing
  • local recommendations
  • hospitality
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