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In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world.

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In the present day,
people
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 have the opportunity to make purchases in different parts of the world. I strongly believe that
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 trend leads to greater
food
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 accessibility and gives a lot of benefits to individuals.
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 why, in my opinion, it positively affects
people
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. First of all, export production is a result of
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. It gives more possibilities
to
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 humans to try new products or
food
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 that may not be available in their area.
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, nowadays a person who lives in Antarctica is able to taste fruits that grow in Africa,
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 as bananas, oranges, and mangoes.
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 suggests that
people
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 will have a broader overview of the world.
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, the global availability of
food
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 engages individuals to explore new cultures and appreciate other countries.
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, it can unite
people
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 from all over the world. It becomes possible to exchange traditional dishes and combine different nations together.
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, it has another impact, which is the loss of traditional cuisine. Mixing their own traditional dishes with others is leading to meals becoming identical. In summary,
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this
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 trend can standardize
food
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, it promotes export production and has the potential to unite
people
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.

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Consider elaborating more on the negative aspects of global food availability to balance your argument. This can enhance your task response.
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Try to improve the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs to strengthen coherence. Using linking words and phrases could help.
task achievement
You presented clear opinions and supported them with relevant examples, showcasing a good understanding of the topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay structure is well-organized, with a clear introduction and conclusion, making it easy to follow.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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