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The graph illustrates the annual incomes of three bakeries in Calgary from 2000 to 2010.

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, Amandine Bakery displayed a steady upward trend throughout the period. It started with $55,000 in 2000, remaining stable until 2005, after which it grew consistently. By 2006, its earnings had reached $60,000 and continued to climb, reaching around $105,000 by 2010, marking a total increase of $45,000 over the decade.

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, Mari Bakeshop faced considerable fluctuations. Starting with $85,000 in 2000, it peaked in 2001 but

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dropped sharply. By 2002, earnings had fallen to $90,000, and despite a recovery in 2003, they declined again. In 2008, the income plummeted to $10,000, recovering slightly to $40,000 by 2010, reflecting a sharp decrease from its initial earnings. Bolo Cakery, starting with $20,000 in 2000, showed steady progress, reaching $30,000 by 2001. After a dip in 2007, it rebounded to $90,000 by 2010, showing a $40,000 rise.

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Amandine Bakery and Bolo Cakery experienced growth, Mari Bakeshop suffered a severe decline.

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The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010.

Experts say if the old people spend time and get along with others and exercise every day, they will be healthier and happier. However, many elderly are suffering from loneliness and lack of fitness. Discuss the causes and solutions?

In many countries, childhood obesity is a growing problem. What are the reasons for this and what can individuals and governments do to tackle the problem?

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