The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022. (rewriteja)

The bar chart illustrates the percentage of how parents in a country spent time taking care of their children in the evening in 2022. (rewriteja)
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The bar figure provides data about the proportion of the
time
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spent by the parents looking after their children in the evening in 2022. In general, it can be seen in the bar chart that the mothers spent more
time
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looking after their kids than the fathers.
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, both of them spent
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playing games, 70%.
According to
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the bar graph, the mothers invested around 75% of the
time
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dressing their descendants,
while
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the fathers only
near
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2%.
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both of them dressed up their
offsprings
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almost 21%. Another significant difference is in helping to do their homework, where the mother spent 50% of the
time
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and the
fathers
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only 10%.
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, both of the progenitors invested 70% of the
time
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playing games with their children and 50% of the period preparing their descendants for bed.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words time with synonyms.
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