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Some people think that paying tax is their only duty, while others believe that we have more responsibility towards our society. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Every citizen pays levies to their
country
 and some people believe expensing on tax is not just the only duty
while
 others think it is enough.
This
 essay describes the positive and negative side of it with my opinion that supporting other expenses to society responsibility. On the one hand, governments were calculating their cash flow and knowing what they should spend to improve their
country
. People pay taxes to the republic with improved environment optimism.
However
, when someone pays a levy on time with a transparent report, they believe it is enough to make the environment better.
On the other hand
, society was built with many factors and some of them were not yet to be seen by stakeholders in that republic.
For example
, to improve education in a
country
, the minister focuses on increasing teacher income and supervising curriculum.
However
, corruption might be the factor that holds cashflow on better student activity that was be stakeholder concern before.
In addition
, citizens should gather to encourage everyone to report individual corruption and make sure nobody eats the money for their personal needs when
country
 expenses have been spent on corruption policy. People should give charity to the community that support teacher or school administrator to report illegal money to provide information about law, safety, and emotional support for victims. For me, the levy was not the only one that needs to reform society because of the need for factors that not covered or are not be major concerns at
this
 moment by the government, we should give charity to some sectors of our nation.
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