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You recently did a short cookery course. The cookery school has asked for your feedback on this course. Write a letter to the course director at the cookery school. in your letter describe what you enjoyed about the course say how much cooking you've done since the course Suggest another cookery course you'd like the school to offer

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Dear Sir, I am writing to share my feedback on the "Cookery for Beginners"
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 that I recently completed at your esteemed school. I thoroughly enjoyed the
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, especially the hands-on experience and the guidance of my instructor, Sanaa, who was incredibly patient and supportive. Throughout the three-month program, I learned how to bake cakes and crêpes,
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 prepare fresh smoothies in under ten minutes. The process of cooking was truly enjoyable, and I appreciated the well-equipped kitchen and the friendly staff who made the learning environment welcoming. Since completing the
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, I have been cooking for my friends, who have been very impressed with my new skills.
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, I have recommended your school to many people, as I believe it offers excellent value for money, particularly with the student discounts. It is, without a doubt, one of the best ways to learn how to cook efficiently in a short period. As a suggestion, I believe it would be beneficial to include more recipes
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 the beginner level, as the
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 finishes quite early.
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 would allow students to gain even more practical experience. I am
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 looking forward to enrolling in the next level of cookery at your school. I look forward to your response. Kind regards, Mariam Chaoui

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task achievement
You might consider adding a specific suggestion for a new course, such as a particular cuisine (e.g., Italian or Asian cooking) to enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph is clear, but you could include more transitions to further enhance the flow between ideas.
writing tone
The letter has a polite and friendly tone, which is appropriate for the context.
coherence and cohesion
The structure of the letter is logical, with clear paragraphs for each point.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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