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Band 3.5

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. Do you agree or disagree with this idea?

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Language
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 has always been considered the tool that reflects
cultures
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.
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, some
people
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 believe that if they had to speak a different
language
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, they would lose their identity. In
this
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 essay, I will explain why I disagree with
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 opinion, as I believe cultural identity can be protected in many different ways.
People
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 used to express their emotions verbally,
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 as love, sadness, hate, and anger.
However
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, words are not always the only tool for that.
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, a newborn baby can deliver feelings of happiness and pain without verbal communication.
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 indicates that
people
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 can socialize without having a common
language
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.
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, emphasizes that emotions are more likely to be physically expressed than orally. The same when talking about
cultures
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 and heritage. Living in a country where
people
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 speak a different
language
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 does not disconnect
people
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 from their
cultures
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. Many artists were able not only to demonstrate their culture through their art performances
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 but
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they
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had the chance to expose their heritage to the world.
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, drama, where performers don't say a word, can successfully introduce serious social
matteres
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matters
 on a wide range. Despite the different languages the audience may speak, they all can understand the message. In
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talking
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speaking
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 a
foriegn
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foreign
language
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 is not a serious problem that
stop
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people
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 from expressing the way they feel, nor an
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obstacle
 that
prevent
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prevents
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 them
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from reflecting
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thir
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their
cultures
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coherence
Ensure that each paragraph develops a clear main idea and that ideas flow logically from one to the next.
coherence
Clarify your introduction and conclusion to better frame your arguments and ensure they are closely tied to the thesis.
task achievement
Provide additional relevant examples to support your main points and enhance the clarity of your arguments.
content
Your essay expresses a clear stance on the topic and provides some intriguing points regarding culture and communication.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Language barrier
  • Cultural norms
  • Social integration
  • Isolation
  • Social faux pas
  • Essential services
  • Healthcare
  • Education
  • Banking
  • Employment opportunities
  • Career advancement
  • Social networks
  • Emotional impact
  • Anxiety
  • Mental health
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