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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Everybody should be allowed admission to university or college programs regardless of their level of academic ability. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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believe
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university
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university
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 on academic
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advantages
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disadvantages
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selected
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Studying
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studying
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teamwork
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different
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different
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, a 2013 study from Cambridge
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 showed that
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veriety
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variety
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team
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 is good but 42
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 need more
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. Turning to the other side of the argument
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may
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people
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different
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. Receliance
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the
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 most important skills that every person
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it
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for
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their
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 of any
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 the different skills of our
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veriety
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variety
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, a 2020 study from Harvard Business School showed that the most important thing for
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. In conclusion, I would argue that
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university
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universities
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 should be given regular exams for entrance and filtering
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to
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all
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efficently
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efficiently
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task achievement
Clarify your thesis statement to clearly indicate your stance on the topic. Ensure that your introduction directly addresses the question of whether you agree or disagree.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical errors as they can affect clarity. For instance, 'studing' should be 'studying' and 'diffrent' should be 'different'.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the linking between ideas. While you have transitional phrases, more direct connections between sentences could improve the flow.
task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument, which demonstrates a balanced approach to the topic.
task achievement
You provided examples from studies to support your points, showcasing a good attempt at incorporating evidence.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic ability
  • higher education
  • equality
  • diversity
  • inclusivity
  • alternative admission criteria
  • skilled individuals
  • learning environment
  • perspectives
  • practical skills
  • portfolios
  • diverse student bodies
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