The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph
illustrate
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the
percantages
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percentages
percentage
of the residents aged 65 and over from 1940 to 2040 in the
USA
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,
Sweden
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and
Japan
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.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that
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Japan
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Japan's
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population increased significantly after 2020.
However
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, the
USA
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was remained
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stable between 2000 and 2020. İn 1940 ,
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Japan
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seniors
were
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decreased
than
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other countries,
with
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5%.
Whereas
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,the
USA
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and
Sweden
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were approximately 10% and 7% respectively.
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Japan
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old population
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decreased slightly from 1940 to 1960 but other nations gradually
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to 15%.
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,
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two decade
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year
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two-year
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period starting in 1960 ,
Japans
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age society
were remained
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remained
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stable. İn 2000 ,
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and
Sweden
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were slightly
increase
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, with 5% and 15% respectively.
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,
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the
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Usa
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US
remained stable at about 15% between 2000 and 2020.
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Japan
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senior inhabitants sharply increased
after
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2020 to 2040,
with
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approximately 27%. At that time
Sweden
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and the
USA
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were
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increased gradually to 25% and about 23% respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, sweden, japan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • aging population
  • proportion
  • elderly
  • significant increase
  • surpass
  • gradual increase
  • crucial period
  • rapid increase
  • healthcare advancements
  • lower birth rates
  • projections
  • adjustments in social services
  • demographic dynamics
  • lifestyle choices
  • trends
  • notable
  • potentially
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