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The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
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The graph gives us information about the amount of cell
phones
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 and
landlines
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 per 100 people in seven different nations.
Overall
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, it is clearly seen that
Canada
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,
US
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the US
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, and
Denmark
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 use more
landlines
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 than mobile
phones
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,
while
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 European countries
handling
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handle
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 more cell
phones
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.
Denmark
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 is the country with the highest use of
landlines
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 with just below 90% and Italy use the lowest with less than half than
Denmark
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 with only 42%.
Canada
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,
USA
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the USA
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, and Sweden are the countries with more
landlines
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 with just over 60 % each. The
number
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 of lines in Germany and The UK fluctuated under 60%. Turning to mobiles, Italy had the highest
number
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 of users with 90% and
Canada
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 had the lowest with just 35 %, almost 3 times less than Italy. The
number
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 of cell
phones
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 in
Denmark
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, the UK and Sweden hovered just over 80% double that US with 40%. Germany doubled the
number
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 of mobiles
of
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in
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Canada
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 with 70% of users.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words phones, landlines, canada, denmark, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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