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The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the popularity of well-known Instagram accounts in 2018 and 2021. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar graph illustrates the information about the most distinguished Instagram
accounts
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 in two different years.
Overall
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, most of the mentioned celebrities'
accounts
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in
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on
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instagram
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Instagram
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 were
in
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apply
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100
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millions
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million
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 and 250
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millions
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million
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 in 2018 and 2021 respectively,
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however
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however,
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 the exceptions to
this
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 were The
rock
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Rock
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 in 2018, and Cristiano Ronaldo in 2021, the least popular and the most famous
account
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 respectively.
To begin
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 with, in 2018, the most prominent
instagram
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Instagram
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 profile was Selena Gomez with nearly 125
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millions
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million
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followers
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,
while
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 the second top was Cristiano Ronaldo and Ariana Grande's
account
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 with over 100 million folks. The least famous
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accounts
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account
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 in 2018 was
the
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The
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Rock's
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Rock
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one
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apply
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with approximately 90
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millions
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million
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followers
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,
while
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kylie
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Kylie
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 Jenner was second to the least successful
account
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 in the same year.
On the other hand
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, Cristiano Ronaldo's
account
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 hold the
top most
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topmost
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 position in 2021 with
record
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a record
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 number of
followers
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 with more than 300 million well-wishers. All other celebrities'
accounts
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 achieved
increased
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the increased
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 amount of
followers
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 in 2021 with almost 250
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millions
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million
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 people.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words accounts, millions, account, followers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • popularity
  • Instagram accounts
  • growth
  • decline
  • comparison
  • remained stable
  • significant change
  • new entries
  • exits
  • patterns
  • trends
  • noteworthy
  • notable
  • fluctuation
  • predominant
  • dominant
  • proliferation
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