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After finishing school, some students go traveling or work for a period of time instead of going directly to university. Do you think the advantages of gap years outweigh the disadvantages?

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students
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 are the backbone of anyone country and their education plays crucial role in development. some of
students
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 choose to work after completing their school, where they want to be independent to pay their bills and infact many are saving money for their admission in most prominent universities. there are mixed reaction from policy makers regarding having gap in education is good or bad thing. so lets discuss pros and cons related to it. Advantages: if
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 choose to work it benefits them, because they can learn new skills
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 interact with growing demand needs
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 job sector. they become independent in managing their expenses, which allows them to gain money managing skills. some
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 are not interested in studying so they can learn skill trade jobs like plumbing, carpentry etc. to excel in their life. most of countries pay more to skill trade workers than an average employed person. Disadvantages: university admission on time is something most of bright
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 want as they want to save time for
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 competition in various fields for eg medical schools or engineering schools. they can became sucessful in their fields in young age even though
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 courses take 4-5 years for completion and they can help in different sectors like in canada their is growing demands for doctors and nurses in healthcare sector. conclusion: I beleieve
students
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 should decide whats best for them. so they can choose the right path without following under peer pressure or any societal pressure. they can give their best if they are in right field.

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You have presented both advantages and disadvantages, demonstrating a good understanding of the topic.
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Your conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint and emphasizes the importance of personal choice.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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