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Overpopulation is becoming a serious issue in many parts of the world. Some people believe that governments should take strict measures to control population growth, while others think it is up to individuals to decide how many children they have. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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People have different views about whether governments should get involved regarding the rapid growth of the
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 in the
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 few decades. In my point of view, some community-control measures should absolutely be implemented by governments in order to achieve
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 stabilization, or we will face some acute problems in the near future. There are some reasons why it could be argued that
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child reading
 is a personal choice. The chief reason behind
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 attitude is the fact that it is actually the basic part of civil liberty.
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 means that deciding to give birth to a child, in the first place, is a human right which should not be taken from individuals. Another major belief which can be considered as one of the significant causes of today’s fast-growing
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 is the improvements in public health, good food production, disease prevention, etc. People strongly believe
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 the mentioned enhancement in
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 the public situation, our planet is ready for
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 boom.
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, I strongly disagree with those who are of the belief that the number of children is a personal decision. Human overpopulation is now among the most pressing environmental issues, silently aggravating the force behind global warming, environmental pollution, habitat loss and the consumption of finite natural resources,
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 as fresh waters and fossil fuels at speeds faster than their rate of regeneration. To tackle these problems, authorities should adopt policies and encourage mothers to limit their
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childbearing
 so that they can achieve
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 balance. In conclusion,
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 there are some reasons to support the right of individuals to decide how many children they want to have, my own view is that states must take action to impede the immense consequences overpopulation may cause.

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Use clearer topic sentences and transitions in each paragraph to guide the reader through your argument more smoothly.
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Strong introduction that clearly states your viewpoint and sets the context for the discussion.
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Well-structured conclusion that reaffirms your stance and summarizes the key arguments effectively.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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